Avoid too many that's, which's, and who's: Raise the nonrestrictive clause to a main or subordinate clause
Most nonrestrictive clauses are unimportant, but if they
are not, raise them to a main or subordinate clause.
| Nonrestrictive clauses, which sometimes
carry ideas important to the flow of argument, should sometimes be
raised to the status of a main clause. |
TRY
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Nonrestrictive clauses sometimes carry
ideas important to the flow of argument and should sometimes be raised
to the status of a main clause. |
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OR
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If nonrestrictive clauses carry ideas important
to the flow of argument, they should sometimes be raised to the status
of a subordinate clause. |
